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Friday, 12 June 2015

long weekend

In the weekend it was just me and my cousin and my nan and Riza .
Firstly Riza and i went to the internet cafe i was cool because
there are a lot of computers that people could play on, but it
was not always for free you had to pay money to go on the computers,so me and Riza paid 5$ for 3 hours.


After that we went to our friends house his name is Stephen and we were playing soccer at his house i got some goal and he did too. Stephen scored another goal
and then dennis came to pick us up we didn’t know he was coming to pick us up from
Stephens house,so we went to our game in cornwall park we went there before but didn't have a game.When we went to cornwall park we started to go back home.  

Then we went to the shops to get some lollies and ice cream.
Later  when we went home we had mince with mixed vegs on toast it was nice because it had mashed potatoes with green brockley inside it. Meanwhile me and Riza had dessert it was ice cream and chocolate sauce with it, yet we went to bed after that. In the next morning we went outside to play basketball
outside it was fun,but we didn't use a basketball hoop we used our imagination,and mister whippy came and we payed use some ice cream then after we went to mcdonalds
to have some big makes and sundays with chocolate sauce then we played hacky sack with our ball then we went to training for 5 hours then we went home at 6:00 then we
went into our pajamas and went to bed.
    

1 comment:

  1. HI Tamati, please remember to PREVIEW your work, the blue text doesn't read very well on the blue background. You've added lots of details to your recount to add interest. You've also used many time linking words (connectives) to make the text flow. Next I would like you to focus on developing your sentence structure, so that each new idea begins in a new sentence.

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